Under the big tree, I fed the birds with a happy mood.The birds were very lovely,and I very li-ke them. Yestreday,I have a good time.What a good day!
修改后：
I went to Xiangshan park with my yesterday. The air was very clean.
In spring, l like lying on the grass in the park. The grass was very soft, and I enjoyed the feeling of lying on the grass, especially under the sun.
I had a good time there. What a good day!
修改老师：Crystal 老师
初二:陈婧涵